Reflection 3.2

Now that I have finished revising my Rogerian essay, I feel confident that I have successfully completed my goal to make the essay not only more "rogerian," but back up these claims with more evidence. In my revision, I utilized another (new) source to back up my claims. I agree, my original draft did have a lot of evidence that backed up the opposing side more than my own, and I tended to do a lot of the arguing on my own with little outside evidence to support me. In my revision, however, I found new evidence that helped me "beef up" my claim that an increase in parental intervention would yield less aggression in children, further supporting my claim that the blame should be placed on the parents and the violent child, not the video game. With this addition, I feel as though it also helped the flow of my argument, with clear and smooth transitioning from the previous and to the next topic.