Reflection 1.2

In my revision of the essay, I not only edited the paper grammatically by fixing several awkward phrases, using more interesting and provoking words, etc., I added another paragraph near the end of the paper that analyzed the choice of occasion for the paper. I spoke of how Weintraut neglected to utilize pathos through mentioning the Arizona shooting--her occasion for writing the editorial. I thought these were valid and interesting points to note, and I'm glad I added them.